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She is so pretty, is so sweet, that I would bow before her feet;
And look up to her, wards the sky, as it would seem like Heaven's eye;
Should gaze upon my mortal form; like starlight's beam, or sunbeams warm;
My heart alight with such a fire; naught could take me far and higher.
I promise now, I come for thee, my lovely lady Maid ..
Whom inspires me, with such beauty, I feel so very deeply, and watch her lasting purity.
©2005-2010 ~erresea
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She is so pretty, is so sweet, that I would bow before her feet;
And look up to her, wards the sky, as it would seem like Heaven's eye;
Should gaze upon my mortal form; like starlight's beam, or sunbeams warm;
My heart alight with such a fire; naught could take me far and higher.
I promise now, I come for thee, my lovely lady Maid ..
Whom inspires me, with such beauty, I feel so very deeply, and watch her lasting purity.

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!MyStyleepisode2 Jul 9, 2005, 8:55:06 PM
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~Lifelarker Jul 9, 2005, 9:06:21 PM
Yes... anywho, about the poem:

I love it, the word-choice way excellent. The way each line sounds when read aloud worked very well. My only question: in the phrase "wards the sky" in line 2, did you mean wards or 'wards (as in towards)? I wasn't really clear on how it would fit as wards.

Nice work.
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~erresea Jul 10, 2005, 1:12:06 AM
Definitely 'wards, but I wanted the effect without the breathless pause caused by an apostrophe so the line runs more quickly.
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~Lifelarker Jul 10, 2005, 7:41:26 AM
Fair enough. Nice poem.
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